# Argument templateThe author(문제에 나온 회사나 부서, 학교의 이름 사용 : 출처를 그냥 그대로 써준다) contends/asserts/concludes/claims that (본문에 나온 주제 부분, 즉 결론이나 조치를 취한 부분을 약간 paraphrase 하여 그대로 적음. 단, 대명사 등으로 변환 필요) ~To demonstrate/support/justify this claim (As evidence for this idea), the author cites/points out that (글에서 사용한 Fact / evidence 그대로 적음) ~This alone, however, does not constitute a logical argument in favor of the conclusion, and it certainly does not provide support of proof of the position that the argument seeks to establish.First, just because (글에서 사용한 Fact / evidence 그대로 적음), it does not mean that (원인 : upcoming 휴가) is the cause of the (결과 : high 생산성). Correlation of two events does not prove that one causes the other. In this case, the author commits a fallacy of oversimplification. There are several major factors contribute to (결과 : high 생산성), but the author ignored some other factors, such as A, B, or some other random factor. Accordingly, the author fails to substantiate this crucial assumption.Second, Even if the author can demonstrate the foregoing assumption that (원인 : upcoming 휴가) is the cause of the (결과 : high 생산성), the author further presumes that (두 번째 Fact나 evidence , 또는 그 결과로 취해진 첫째 조치 : 휴가 일정 제한 will result in high 생산성). However, there is no clear evidence. Here, the author assumes without justification that the background conditions have remained the same at the different time and different places. To be specific, employees may (may not) ~. Without ruling out of all other possible explanation for (2nd assumption), the author cannot persuade me.The last assumption on which the author relies is that (the best way to deal with the problem of the company’s declining MS is to increase employee’s productivity : 과연 문제를 해결하기 위한 방법은 여러 각도로 생각했는가에 대한 원초적 의문을 제기). However, the author overlooks other aspects of MS, such as A, B, and C. Without considering such aspects, the last assumption will prove wrong.In sum, the author’s argument is not well supported as it stands. The argument depends on unproven cause and effect relationship between (원인 : upcoming 휴가) and (결과 : high 생산성). Moreover, it is unclear whether 휴가 일정 제한 will result in high 생산성. In addition, it is possible that the problem of the company’s declining MS is not due to low productivity, but some other factor. To strengthen this argument, the author should provide explicit evidence for all of these issues.Finally, to better evaluate this argument, I would need to conduct employee survey on the 휴가, 생산성, and some other aspects of competition.
